Critics thread for poems and shortstories

[Helén]

This is meant to be the thread where you can put down your meaning about the poems and stories that hopefully will fill the poems thread.

Please respect that the poemsthread should be free from all comments. :classic:

When you comment - think about what you actually say. You don't have to like what you read, but to put someones efforts down would be real nasty. be consrtuctive in your critics.

Thank you! :classic:

[Emidio]

I just loved Tess' poem! Great, constructive, and the most important: Creative! ;) Congrats Tess, keep up with the nice work!! :classic:

[Helén]

I don't have to say anything Tess. You already know how much I love your poems. :classic:
I look forward to see the next. I think I know already which one it is. ;)
This one has a real message to the world too.

*gives Tess a big hug*

[starchip]

Good poem Tess that was really deep:)

and the same for FaeLuna:)

[FaeLuna]

I'm thinking maybe I should edit Nina's post at the beginning of the writing thread, so there's a link up there to THIS thread?? What does everyone think?

I liked reading Tess's poem!! And I think it's a great idea Nina has here with the comments thread and the writings thread!!

[Helén]

Oh you mean that when you click for reply you automatically get here? Why not? There is this thing that the threads easily can get apart to far and ppl can't find it.
Or - make them sticky??? I think that our ppl here can deserve that. The poem thread at the top then. I believe we have many here that makes great stuff and I just wanted to give them this chance. :)
That way you don't have to rewrite the text on the first posts. And they will "stick together". erhmm (very bad joke)
Anyway I'm glad someone thinks it was a good idea. :) Thanks

And Fae. What a beutiful poem!!! No wonder it has been published!

[FaeLuna]

Well, I added the link to this thread in the other one, so I'll go make that one sticky now, good idea! :D

[Jake]

yes, very good poems. i think both tess and Fae have lots of talent..

[FaeLuna]

:D Wow so much appreciation so fast!! *blush!*

OK I made the thread for actual writings sticky, and you can get to here from there! It should all work out well. :)

[Emidio]

I haven't seen your there, Fae!! Really nice!!!! Loved it! Congrats! :) :) :)

[Emidio]

And if i put my story here??? Instead of there? What you think, Fae? :rolleyes:

[FaeLuna]

Um, now I'm confused... where is "here" and "there" exactly Emidio? Where did you put your thread with your story? Are you talking about adding your story to the Writings thread?

[Emidio]

I made the thrill story, and put in other thread. And if i put it on the writing/poems/story one?:)

[FaeLuna]

ah ok, I get it now! :) At first it sounded like you were going to add your story to HERE, the Critiques thread!! :p See why I got confused? :D

I think since yours is already in its own thread it would be ok to leave it like that, but post other stories and stuff in the writing/poems/story thread if you like! :) :whitekitty:

[Emidio]

You see what sleep do to me? Completely nonsence stuff!! :laugh:

I'll se what i would do... ;)

[sugar_junkie]

lol,thanx you guyz :) i actually wanted ta throw that and a few other poemz away,lol ;)

*givez everyone a real big tyerz hug* :)

you guyz mind if i post another one?
Fae,i luved ur poem!! :D :)

[FaeLuna]

Hey, I'd love to see more of your poems Sugar!! :D And I'm glad you liked my poem too! :) :whitekitty:

Poor Emidio... I can't tell if you got too much sleep so you're all sleepy still, or if you NEED more sleep and didn't get enough!!

[Helén]

Oh Tess.
That poem is so sad. But I do recognize the feelings. *sighes* It does hurt when people suddenly change towards you. Not necessarily that they ignore you, it can be in other ways as well.

But I really love it Tess. I hope it makes people think before they take others for granted.

[sugar_junkie]

awwww....thanx nina! :)

yea,i know itz sad,lol i wrote it when i woz real mad and upset,lol

[Helén]

Oh erhm Fae. I think Lucas did misunderstand you. He posted his thriller under poems too. so it's double posted - I haven't chacked the writings thread yet.... lol

[FaeLuna]

I especially like the end of that one, because I've felt like that too, that they don't care but I still think they're neat and wish they would be nice to me!

[Jake]

that was great poem tess, tho i have to agree and say it was sad. i have felt similar to that many times in my short life. more than a person should...
keep up the good work tess..

[sugar_junkie]

thanx Jake :)

*givez everyone a big hug* :)

[Emidio]

I was sleepy. See what kind of stuff i do when i'm sleepy? I'm sorry for what i wrote yesterday nina, about the dictionary, you were trying to help me and i was really irritated (other stuff, not you). Sorry again, ok?

[sugar_junkie]

hey droz :) i liked ya poem lotz! :D it woz real cooliez,but kinda sad :( but it woz real good! :)

[Droz]

Thank ya kindly madam. *tips hat*

(I'm random, don't take anything by the way I say "thank you")

[sugar_junkie]

nperz :)

[Emidio]

Has anyone actually read my story?? :) :laugh:

[Helén]

Uhm Lucas you made an own thread for it remember. There you have comments on it.

[Emidio]

Fae closed it, Nina :classic:

[Helén]

Aha Lucas. I see. :classic:

[Emidio]

I loved your text, (poem, don't know how to say) it's so deep. It's beatiful!!! Liked it a lot! :classic: :classic:

[starchip]

You know Nina ever since we had that talk about short stories you really have been poasting alot in the art forum did I give you some insperation?

[Helén]

You could say that. You and of course Tess!!! :classic:

[sugar_junkie]

awww...really?

[Helén]

Yes Tess... really!!! :classic:

*gives Tess a very big hug*

[sugar_junkie]

*hugz nina backerz with a bigger hug*

nahhh,i didnt do anythin at all

[Emidio]

I loved this art writing thing! It's great! :D

[timz2rules]

i have only one thing to say to these wonderful poems and story(ies)

*applauds loudly* very very well done...

[Helén]

*bows to the ground* :classic:

Thanks Tim! You write real good yourself! :classic:
It really got to me and.. I think I understand.

*gives Tim big hug*

[sugar_junkie]

yea,i agree wif nina,Tim your poem is reallly really good :)

*smilez at Tim* :D

[Helén]

Starchip. That's great!!! :classic:

[starchip]

Thanx I Just found it in one of my old folders:)

[Helén]

Lucas, those are sweet ones!! :classic:

[Emidio]

Thanks Nina!! :) :) :)

[sugar_junkie]

yea,i agree with nina too,the poem Luc wrote woz really sweet :) star'z poem woz really good too :) :D

[Emidio]

Thanks people!! All the poems are great... All of them!! Congrats for all the writers!! ;) :p

[Helén]

That goes to you too Lucas. :classic:

[sugar_junkie]

that goez for you too nina ;) :D :)

[Emidio]

That goes for you too Tess:p

[sugar_junkie]

lol ;) goez for you too Luc ;)

[sugar_junkie]

lol,dont mean to flood but i think nina'z song is really really good! :D

[Helén]

Aww Tess sweetie. Thanks a lot :classic::classic:

*gives Tess a big big hug*

Tess!!

"Trapped" is awesome. It contains so much of the feelings behind hardship. It really moved me, as all your writing does. Yhanks for sharing it with us. You're so special Tess. :classic:

[sugar_junkie]

aww....thanx nina :)

but seriously i dont find my writing great,and i dont think i'm special either,i think nina,is the one who is so special :)

[VanDeGraff]

Thanks everyone for the wonderful fun poems and bits. I'll be posting some short scenes here. I plan to practice and some day come just short of writing an awful novel out of.. something I'm working on. I hope you enjoy my writings too. Well, I'm off to read some more of yours and discover the use of sig pics on this forum. :beard:

[sugar_junkie]

hey van :D :) nice ta see ya here :) welcome ta worldz,have fun :)

[Helén]

Thanks Van. And I'm really looking forward to see your shortstories. :classic:

[alapokeygirl]

Great jobs everyone. I just read them all and thier is a lot of talent out there. Maybe one day I'll have the courage to do the same. :classic:

[lewdini]

Nice Lucas

[Helén]

Tess. I LOVE your last poem. It's lovely. But you have always been so good at it. And I'm SO happy to see you back here. :classic:

*Gives Tess a huge huge hug*

:bunny::bunny::bunny::bunny::bunny:

[sugar_junkie]

awwww...thanx nina :D *gives nina a bigger hug back* :)
lol,the only people who like my poems are you and a few others,otherwise it just gets put down,lol,oh well,thanx again nina :)

[Helén]

There's no such thing as bad poems Tess. Just bad critics. :p
All people respond to things differently, but that doesn't mean it's bad. It's the same with music and books. We like different things.But you are really GOOD Tess!

*Hugs Tess back*

[Jake]

*stands up clapping for tess* good job tess! i'm SO glad your writtin again! :) that is a very good poem, and good philosophy to go by ;) :):D keep up the good work!
*gives ya a big big huge hug*

[sugar_junkie]

*gives jake a bigger hugger hug back* :p thanx :D

thanx nina and jake :D i'm lost for words,lol :p thanx again you two :D *HUGE HUGS*

[Helén]

*Smiles at Tess and Jake*

You two are a lot of fun. Always competing about the biggest hug. I don't think there is a better competition to do. Noone looses. There are only winners.:laugh:

[sugar_junkie]

*smiles back :D*

[Helén]

Yes I bugged Goku a lot to post his nice, little poem here at worlds. :p :classic: We shouldn't go without that nice one, should we? ;)
Well done Goku.

*Gives Goku a big hug*

[FaeLuna]

Whew! I've missed a lot going on here in the creative corner!! I kept forgetting to check! :o This is great so many of you are sharing your creative side!! :D

Phoenix reminded me this was here, so I came to read her poem, and I really did like it. :) I love fantasy and faerie tales, and this poem reminds me a little of the writings of Charles De Lint, one of my favorite authors. :D

[sugar_junkie]

nice poem phoenix :D

[hataz_gon_hate]

Nice Poems evryone....today, i jus noticed how poetic evryone here is....maybe except me.....:D

[Helén]

That was good Tess. It's kind of sad, but really good. You got so much feelings into it, in such a few words.
I'm impressed. :D

[lewdini]

Impressive...most impressive

[sugar_junkie]

lol,thanx :D wrote that during math the other day ;) :p

[Helén]

Jake!! It's so good!! :classic: I'm so happy you decided to post Sorrow here. I love that piece, just love it. :classic:

*Gives Jake a huge huge hug*

[Jake]

aw, its not THAT nice... but thanks *hugs ya back*

[Helén]

Yes it is Jake. You have a direct way to express yourself which I feel goes directly to me, and makes it clear and bright. :classic:

[sugar_junkie]

lol,very well done jake!!! :D congrats!! its a lovely piece :D

*gives jake a big congrats hug* :D

[Helén]

Billie you wrote that "Whisper"? It's lovely. :classic:
We really have a lot of creative talents here. It's great. And it sure cheres up too.

That poem Philip is a beutiful one. Do you write any yourself too? I would love to see them. :classic:.

That humour about physics is really good too. Unfortunately I don't think I understood all, but I'm really lousy in the subject. :p

[Cairin]

There are some great poems gathered here! I love poems. I was just wondering if all these creative minds here are interested to see some pics as well. This is my galery on Elfwood. This is a site where artists and writers can show their work to others, perhaps you're interested :p

http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/art/c/a/cairin/cairin.html (http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/art/c/a/cairin/cairin.html)

Greetz,
Cairin

[Sim2 Rox da World]

Love the stuff!!!!!!!!!! :bigthumbsup: