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Emidio
11-11-2002, 02:55 PM
Hope you all like it!
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On the start of the XIX century, on a house in a far away city of Europe, lived a little girl called Erica.She was blond and had her little 11 years. In fact, nobody knows the country she lived in.

Her town had less than 200 people. Everybody knew everyone. Although it was a small place, she loved to live there with her parents and her aunt. Her parents, Marta and Robert were very friendly and loved the girl so much. They used to possess a lot of money.

It was a dark and rainy saturday night. It was a big room. Large walls and ceilings, decorated with the most beautiful and shining velvet. The floor was made of wood, and the hall could be seen through the main door. The stairs were made of oak wood, and with gold details. Robert was sit on his couch in front of the fire, smoking with calm. The fireplace was made of italian marble, and it was shining with the light. In front of his couch, a Bear rug, wich he had hunted by his own. On the side of the couch, on a green and red velvet armchair, Marta was reading her book. She was having a good time. Her glasses, made of pure gold, showed the power of the Mandson family.

The thunders were perfect for a horror movie, and the storm was getting even bigger and bigger.Erica was in her room, probably sleeping. It was very late for a child to be awaken.

Belinda, her old and mad aunt was appearently in her room. She hated the Mandson. She was Marta's sister, and wasn't ever happy to know that she didn't got the money of their father. Marta was powerful. Had money, everything. She was a very jealous person.

Of course Belinda's first priority was to get all the money from the Mandson's. She had the opportunity and time to steal it. She had seen some times before Marta hiding the money into a place down the dining room. It was a secret room that was under the table. The gold bars and money were hidden there.

It was far from the living room, and she could perfectly do the job. She had time and opportunity.

She preferred the hard way to possess everything. The thunderstorm was getting bigger and higher.Going down into the first floor, she went smoothly as a cat, and....

On Sunday morning, the Mandson's were found dead. Aunt Belinda was crying together with Erica. The poor child was sad, and the tears were falling from her face. The fancy and black funeral was in a sunny day. The house's butler was the one that contracted and found a decent cemetery where the couple could rest in peace.

The judge decided that the money needed to stay into Belinda's hand. The death cause? An overdose of aspirin. That was the judge said. There was no external sign of hurt or any "damage". As the most close relative, she had the right to keep the money. And she did.

On Monday morning, Belinda could have the official document of the money possetion. She promissed Erica to give her everything she needed. Erica sadly got trough the main hall and reached the front garden. It was a very beautiful garden. Roses were everywhere, and she could see the iron and full of details gate. The bushes were cut by an expert gardener. His name was Theo. He looked as a nice guy, and always was on time to do his work. He didn't bother anyone, and when he finished the work, calmly went away and said bye and thanks to everyone.

Erica said the guy a sad hi. He answered with a happy one. Erica went to play in the playground in the backyard, and cryed so much hurt and sad tears. Her heart was in pain. She was drowning on her own tears.

Decided to go out and look for help, she cleaned her face and went to find Edward. He was another millionaire son, and had much power
and money. He was older, and for Erica's luck, his father was a detective. In fact, the only detective in the whole town.

Talking to Edward, she was lead to Thomas Burkin. Thomas was the only and bright detective on the entire town. He was very competent too. Erica asked for help, and as soon as he could, Thomas would verify the crime scene. He had a strange face. A long nose, and a big forehead. His eyes were brown, and he used to have a clock on his pocket.

Erica decided to come home, and to stay with her aunt, although she didn't like it. Opening the big and brown wood door, she heard an evil laugh. She could feel on her soul that her aunt was liking it.
She passed through the living room, and went to her bedroom. It was a child bedroom. In fact a girl's. Everything was pink, and she found her clothes and toys the way she let the last time she went there. A picture of her mother was in the wall, and for a moment she could feel her mother presence in the room. She sat on her bed, and a small tear fell from her face.

That tear was the one that brighted her memory and her mind. She decided to sleep to see if the night would pass faster, so the other morning would come. This way she would be able to follow the investigation. She hugged her little stuffed Teddy bear and tried to fall asleep.

In late night, Erica had a dream. It wasn't bad. She could feel in a world of happiness and safety. She saw Marta and Robert together. They said to her to don't be scared and to keep up on that way. She would found the real truth. In a warm hug, they got away from each other. And the couple started to get further and further. She could feel the warm hug and the sensations.

Erica woke up with a bright light on her face. It was the sun. She woke up anxious to start the investigation, and when coming to living room, she found Thomas. He was examining every single part of the room. And he could see at that time what happened with the couple. He decided to tell the truth.

Belinda was really intented to murder the couple. She got a hunting knife on Robert's wardrobe, and went down the stairs to kill one and after the other. As soon as she entered the room, she saw the two bodies. They were already dead. There were just one person left that could commit the crime. Yes. He gave the couple a cup of tea with poison. Just HE had acess to such things. Just HE could kill both.

The murder was the family butler, James. James wanted to have the money of the family, the power and to be recognized. Although, he saw Belinda coming and then he decided to share the whole money in half. And they did it.

Belinda assumed the position of aunt, but didn't mean anything to Erica. The 2 were arrested and Erica was at least in peace. She couldn't be alone, so her Grandmother went to live with her. At least she could have a tea and her ginger bread cookies. The best tea she ever had.

FaeLuna
11-11-2002, 03:01 PM
Wow! :D

Emidio
11-11-2002, 03:03 PM
Did you like it, Fae??? :classic:

FaeLuna
11-11-2002, 03:05 PM
Yes, I liked it, it had many elments of the classic horror story. I especially liked the part where the girl sleeps in the room and feels her parents' love. And I was surprised at the end because I thought the Aunt did it all along! :D

Emidio
11-11-2002, 03:09 PM
Thanks Fae.... :classic: :classic:

*Gives Fae a big hug*:)

Helén
11-11-2002, 04:07 PM
Seems this story is double posted???

FaeLuna
11-11-2002, 04:22 PM
It wasn't at first, I guess I should close this thread now that he's added it to the other one! :)